Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important for young people to follow some rules set up by society. I personally believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey aren't any close to strict. Instead, they have been more liberal compared to the past. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following passage.
To begin with, many societies' structures have changed over the last few centuries, from autocracy to domestic, which means people nowadays enjoy more freedom and liberty, and this, of course, includes the youths. A century ago, several countries still had their own social hierarchy, but today, the majority of them have collapsed. For example, the Joseon dynasty, the predecessor of Korea, was one of the many nations that had a strict stratum system. People between different classes couldn't become couples due to the law. Therefore, young people must follow these rules that eliminated their chance and right to have a romance with someone they may like, they sometimes even required to marry someone just for political purposes. However, young people in South Korea now enjoy their romance instead of the restrictions of the law. Some of whom married the rich would not be able to enjoy their current life if they were born 100 years ago.
Moreover, people become open-minded than before, so do their societies. Far from being insular, societies now are able to accept people to take occupations that once were restricted to a certain gender. For instance, people used to believe that only females can become nurses and political leaders could only be males. Nevertheless, male nurses are commonly seen in hospitals, and female leaders aren't rare cases anymore. That is to say, young people now are able to tackle the obsolete social rules that once precluded people from the field they are interested in.
In summary, since the structures of many societies have changed and people are no longer provincial, the statement is flawed. According to my exposition, I fundamentally disagree with the statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in summary, of course, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10619469027 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51268221867 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587020648968 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1474314036 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1666666667 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250846333986 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791662845347 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835170950613 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164952549047 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712967156621 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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