Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important for young people to follow some rules set up by society. I personally believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey aren't any close to strict. Instead, they have been more liberal compared to the past. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following passage.
To begin with, many societies' structures have changed over the last few centuries, from autocracy to domestic, which means people nowadays enjoy more freedom and liberty, and this, of course, includes the youths. A century ago, several countries still had their own social hierarchy, but today, the majority of them have collapsed. For example, the Joseon dynasty, the predecessor of Korea, was one of the many nations that had a strict stratum system. People from different classes couldn't become couples due to the law. Therefore, young people must follow these rules that eliminated their chance and right to have a romance with someone they may like, they sometimes even required to marry someone just for political purposes. However, young people in South Korea now enjoy their romance instead of the restrictions of the law. Some of whom married the rich would not be able to enjoy their current life if they were born 100 years ago.
Moreover, people become open-minded than before, and so do their societies. Far from being insular, many societies now are able to accept people to take occupations that once were restricted to a certain gender. For instance, people used to believe that only females could become nurses and political leaders could only be males. Nevertheless, male nurses are commonly seen in hospitals now, and female leaders aren't rare cases anymore. That is to say, young people now are able to tackle the obsolete social rules that once precluded people from the field they are interested in. Boys who are enamored of nursery can easily find a job in hospital if they own proper related certification or degree, while girls who have passion in politics won’t be blocked from the stage by the society.
In summary, since the structures of many societies have changed and people are no longer provincial, the statement is flawed. According to my exposition, I fundamentally disagree with the statement.
Moreover, people become open-minded than before, so do their societies. Far from being insular, societies now are able to accept people to take occupations that once were restricted to a certain gender. For instance, people used to believe that only females can become nurses and political leaders could only be males. Nevertheless, male nurses are commonly seen in hospitals, and female leaders aren't rare cases anymore. That is to say, young people now are able to tackle the obsolete social rules that once precluded people from the field they are interested in.
In summary, since the structures of many societies have changed and people are no longer provincial, the statement is flawed. According to my exposition, I fundamentally disagree with the statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in summary, of course, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12175648703 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57112946587 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439121756487 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3338443215 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6923076923 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2692307692 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26923076923 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227572956258 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734247640128 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740690859727 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148857226614 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649139521743 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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