It is hard to deny that social regulations play an essential role in young people’s lives. They prevent the young from going wrong. While these ideas have their base, they need to be scrutinized meticulously before we reach a conclusion. In my opinion, some of those rules are too hard to follow. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, since a child is born, there seem to be many rules to follow. All children are meant to be successful in the future. Most parents push their child to study hard in order to get admission to a well-known university. These actions may result in finding a well-paid job. However, not all children have the talent to learn. Those expectations can be unrealistic and ridiculous. They may also sacrifice children’s golden childhood. Young people can gain success in their own way. Take my uncle for example. He has no interest in his major in university and he is good at painting. Thus he devotes himself to painting and becomes a well-known artist.
Furthermore, after graduating from university, young people face more unwritten rules. there is an invisible rule that societies downplay the ingenuity of young people. Nonetheless, as reported, young people’s creativity is amazing. It’s not uncommon that elder employees have higher salaries than new employees. Besides, elder workers always view newcomers as competitors. In this sense, young people should multiply efforts in order to be senior employees. Generally, young people are inclined to be receptive to new staff and embrace unique concepts, which invariably makes a big difference in the specific case. Thus, the unequal rule would decrease the communities’ productivity.
To sum up, society, even the parents, put too much restriction on young people’s life. It designed one way of success without considering children’s talent and happiness. Meanwhile, it also has negative impacts on societies themselves.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Today students are more interested in politics than they were in the past 70
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: There
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22327044025 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90915857107 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632075471698 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5099011375 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.5185185185 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.7777777778 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.48148148148 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200878909661 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492378539819 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534836156494 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119485952831 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373680711631 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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