Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the importance of rules and laws in the society.If I were forced to choose, I would definitely stand in the firm opposition to this claim. Even though some people think that these rules are so strict, It is my firm belief that this statement is not true at all. I have two major reasons to support my assertion, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think without these strict laws the society could reach to anarchy. I have to admit that my opinion has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, one of my friend drove her car when he was drunk. The police stopped her to make sure she is fine. As a matter of fact, she was out of her mind. She could not pay attention to the road. The policeman was concerned with her well-being. The policeman made her to call to her family and explain his situation. after couple of hours, one of her parents picked her up. As a result, the policeman assured that she is not going to drive in that condition. I thinks examples like this could show us how much is important to obey those strict rules in order to prevent anarchy. In addition, in some cases like I mentioned in the example, it could be even damaging to the people to not obey the rules. I should mention that this type of bad situation happen for the younger generation of society.
Finally, I believe obeying some strict laws could help society to reach to better situation. For example, if the people in some city obey driving rules that society could get to the better position from that aspects. It is really vivid that society improves by the performances of the their people. So, when they obey rules this is going to be really plausible for that situation to foster and get to the better point. In some modern country like Japan, you can see that these regulations help them to have a better driving culture. Therefore, I my point of view, obeying strict laws could adjust all societies and probably there is needed for younger people to obey that rules in order to improve the situation of the society.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, believe that following strict rules are going to be beneficial for all member of the society and I consider not reach to an anrchy and foster the society as two major reasons. Although, there are going to be more reasons on this topic, In my view, these reasons are more important than the others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, really, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my view, in some cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.539503386 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38256905355 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458239277652 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4607102258 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7916666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4583333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175117620611 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04731666924 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471436535537 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111267015343 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029579056053 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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