Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Scientific discoveries should be shared around the world. Government should not keep it privately.
Nowadays, many governments find out new scientific discoveries to improve their lifestyle. However, some governments do not want to share their knowledge of scientific discoveries with other countries. They also hold this wisdom themselves, and they exploit them as enhancing their living standards. In my view, they should provide new scientific findings to other countries. From this action, people obtain equal opportunities compared with other countries to achieve advanced technologies, educations, and treatments for diseases.
To begin with, connecting new scientific discoveries with other countries establish evolved equipment as same as possible for each of them. When a country earns new skills in discoveries, this country relieves citizens by developing technologies. For instance, people introduce 5G to expand the network as quickly as possible. After proving it in a country, it is so effective for them to live more easily because they ran the internet so fast, comfortable contact with people who live in other countries, and work at their home, not in their companies. Nevertheless, people have to live the same life without experiencing these comforts if they cannot reach discoveries from other countries. As a result, the government should connect with other countries for the improvement of others.
Secondly, people acquire the same opportunities to give young people education by sharing new scientific ideas. Some young people concern about places where they can study due to some reasons such as inadequate income to go to school, buy textbooks, and so on. When the government utilizes new scientific notions for them, they can help them to give equal education places. For instance, young children earn tablets to participate in their classes in their homes. Moreover, they are capable of viewing their textbooks for each lecture. Therefore, they gain the same educational opportunities compared with other countries.
Finally, doctors treat their patients with the same technologies as other countries by new scientific findings from other governments. In this time, people have to go abroad to fix their worse illnesses such as cancers, diabetes, and viral infections, and so on. Moreover, they have to spend significant money to treat symptoms in other countries. Therefore, some people give up to take diagnosis in abroad. On the other hand, once the government finds new ways to repair these patients by discoveries from other countries, this country can hold the hospitals where people who have intractable diseases live in.
To sum up, the government should share their new scientific findings with other countries. I surely believe that people construct the same opportunities compared with other countries to acquire advanced technologies, educate young generations, and treat intractable people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57736720554 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94589201982 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482678983834 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.552092473 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.625 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0416666667 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132705382373 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564925577304 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717433936789 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105700023085 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548456847732 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.