Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more interested in politics than they were in the past
Many students intrigue in various types of subjects compared with the past time. However, while some students are more interested in politics than they were in the past, some consider that politics do not match their favorite even now. It is so controvertible for them to decide specific one selection. In my view, students are intriguing in politics compared with the previous time. They have opportunities to access several sources about politics and obtain the decisions to vote candidates of politicians for their future.
To begin with, students hold more bountiful access to know about politics than they were in the past. Nowadays, people create a lot of advanced technologies to search for news without using television programs or newspapers. Even if they do not have chances to research news outside of their house where they often have television or by buying newspapers in book stores or convenience shops, it is easy for them to access plenty of subjects about events happened in the world to turn on the internet by computers or smartphones. Moreover, people who lived since the past time could not buy televisions when they were children because these elasticities were highly precious. It is normal for them to obtain only one at each house from each street. Therefore, our ancestors could not know enough and detailed information about politics. Thus, students are more excited about politics than they were in the past.
Secondly, now, politics become more popular in students than previously by the right to vote politicians from young people. In the past time, young people did not acquire that they make decisions vital people for prospective their home countries with owned their hands. Hence, their politicians provide incomprehensive constitutions to their civils, so these countries gradually collapse. On the other hand, some governments give young people the same rights to vote matched with mature people. Once they go to the facilities to vote the candidates whose they want them to be the core of their countries, they continue warning that the people who are voted by young people establish new strategies for them until they succeed in their governments.
To sum up, students more attention in politics than they were in the past, I surely believe that they are easy to earn places where they know about politics compared with the past time and vote the political candidates by the new rights.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11809045226 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64666382896 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492462311558 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1247852535 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348299578131 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135005841972 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140532142244 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268852917215 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864972175023 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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