For young people, adolescence is a crucial time that shapes their personalities and interests. Schools are one of the influential factors to impact on their future. I believe that students are influenced both by their teachers and by their friends, and both influences on students depend on how much they spend time with. Because students’ life is diverse, it is hard to conclude which influence on students is more significant.
First, the more time with their friends, the more influential they are to students. Some students like to hang out with friends while others prioritize spending time alone or their family. I think if extrovert students are more likely to spend time with their friends. By contrast, time with friends would be less important for introvert students and those who are under the control of their parents. I guess they would rather choose to read or studying by themselves at their homes, which would have affected their perspectives more than their friends.
Second, their teachers can influence students more than by their friends if the teachers build close relationships with the students. For example, some students are more open to teachers about asking questions about classes. Besides, clubs and extra activities can help students to know more about their teachers. Working with teachers could encourage students to develop close bonds with teachers, which can influence students' interests. Teachers can also better understand the students’ personalities and concerns, interacting with them outside the classrooms.
In conclusion, the students’ life is unique depends on their personalities, family, and their interests. Because of diverse opportunities to interact with friends and teachers, it is difficult to determine what influence the students most. Therefore, I believe the greatest impact on students relies on who they spend their most time with.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on who they spend their most time with.
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i guess, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44745762712 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79439254653 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484745762712 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8921549321 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.5294117647 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3529411765 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378776769774 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1602053203 0.076458572812 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733606501351 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271713736736 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260258070335 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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