Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, successful people play a significant role in all societies. Some people believe that successful people are those who do what they already know how to do in the best way possible, while others might take an opposite view. I personally believe that successful people are those who are risk-takers and adventures. I have two reasons clarifying my belief, which I aim to explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who are risk-takers can gain ample experience in their lives on various occasions. These experiences help to understand their weakness and strengths and lead to use them for their success. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, my brother, who was the mayor of my city, decided to make a new park in entrancing the city as a new project; however, all of his co-workers rejected his idea. Before the project, he knew that he had a new challenge, and he should work hard. He made the park, and this experience led to him being selected as a successful person in the city.
The next reason is that People who are risk-takers can improve their confidence. In fact, when people cope with problems, they get positive reactions from others, which can enhance their confidence. For instance, two years ago, I had a seminar presentation. I was always afraid of speaking in front of other people, but I decided to overcome my fear. I prepared myself and gave a presentation for about fifty people. At the end of the presentation, the people who were there had a positive attitude towards my presentation. This presentation led to improving my confidence.
In conclusion, according to the reasons and examples mentioned above, I strongly believe that risk-takers are successful people. This is because they can gain enough experience in their lives and can improve their confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91401273885 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88478256812 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531847133758 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7993142284 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2105263158 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180129518501 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531575386132 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674773787958 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119172137762 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878805561706 0.0645574589148 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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