Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, successful people play a significant role in all societies. Some people believe that successful people do what they already know how to do in the best way possible, while others might take an opposite view. I believe that successful people are those who are risk-takers and adventures. I have two reasons clarifying my belief, which I aim to explore in the following essay.
First of all, people who are risk-takers can gain ample experience in their lives on various occasions. These experiences help to understand their weakness and strengths and lead to use them for their success. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, my brother, the mayor of my city, decided to make a new park in entrancing the city as a new project; however, all of his co-workers rejected his idea. Before the project, he knew that he had a new challenge, and he should work hard. He made the park, and this experience led to him being selected as a successful person in the city.
The following reason is that People who are risk-takers can improve their confidence. When people cope with problems, they get positive reactions from others, which can enhance their confidence. For instance, two years ago, I had a seminar presentation. I was always afraid of speaking in front of other people, but I overcame my fear. I prepared myself and gave a presentation for about fifty people. At the end of the presentation, the people there had a positive attitude towards my presentation. This presentation led to improving my confidence.
In conclusion, according to the reasons and examples mentioned above, I firmly believe that risk-takers are successful people. This is because they can gain enough experience in their lives and can improve their confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94701986755 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90831039852 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539735099338 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1008461979 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6315789474 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8947368421 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191755661391 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563670643068 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720000876459 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126417686096 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933832710302 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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