Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, universities and colleges play a significant role in all societies. Some people believe that classes and libraries should receive more financial support than sports and social activities, while others might take the opposite view. I personally believe that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support, just like classes and libraries. I have two reasons for clarifying my belief, which I aim to explore in the following essay.
First of all, sports and social activities can provide experience and skills for students. In fact, students can improve skills such as teamwork, communication, and attention to detail. The more students spend time in sports and social activities, the more they can gain these skills. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, my brother studied French at a university, but he was afraid to speak in front of other students. He spoke with his supervisor professor about his fright, and he told him to attend a workshop. He decided to attend the workshop, and he learned how to speak for others. This workshop helped him overcome his fright, and he can communicate with others better now. Had the university not spent money on the workshop, he would not have improved his communication skills.
The second reason that comes to one’s mind is that social activities and sports can teach students new ideas. In other words, when students attend social activities, they can share their ideas together, and this helps them develop their thoughts. One compelling example of this reason is that a few years ago, I attended a computer class at a university, and I asked other students to help me solve problems. This class helped me improve my ideas about computer programming. Not only was the class great for me, but it was also great for the other students. Therefore, I believe that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support, such as classes and libraries.
In conclusion, according to the reasons and examples mentioned above, I strongly believe that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support, just like classes and libraries. This is because social activities and sports can provide skills and experience for students, and they can teach students new ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...support, such as classes and libraries. In conclusion, according to the reasons ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15915119363 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68250426675 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458885941645 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6163495477 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.619047619 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9523809524 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280185756989 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972540051742 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117481864571 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2225629193 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10819982506 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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