Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology is one of the most useful form of science for general population. In simple words, technology is when we take the concepts of science and transform them into gadgets and devices that are important for us as human being. When we look around us everything is a result of or a form of technology. Some people are inclined towards the attitude that the advancement in science is making people more innovative nowadays, whereas, others hold the different perspective. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of technology. I personally, though believe that technology is making everyone more dumb. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that computers have all the information. In past people was accustomed to read a lot of books in order to gain knowledge and now all information is available in one click. For example, when I was in school whenever we got the research assignment we had to work hard all day and night it was really arduous. After three years when I was in university, I heard about this technology at first. It was unbelievable and the work that we did in days now it get done only in an hour and ideas are present on internet. Therefore, this example illustrates that if all stuff is present on the laptops students will not use their own mind.
Secondly, with the improvement of this technology people are loosing there jobs because all the things that were supposed to be done by human brain computers are doing it. In future computers will take the place of human because the system that was fixed is amazing. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I worked for the company in marketing and my job was to come up with more ideas for the name of medicines and hoe should be the appearance of the medication. Later in market the technology was introduced and I got fired. Now, I am teaching to students to fulfil my needs.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that in past people were more creative and imaginative because they were using their brains.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to reading'.
Suggestion: accustomed to reading
...all the information. In past people was accustomed to read a lot of books in order to gain knowled...
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Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...and the work that we did in days now it get done only in an hour and ideas are pres...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, as for, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67792207792 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68623421831 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52987012987 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.471906997 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.05 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123869431607 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373804011639 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519972398696 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957328311931 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658836894504 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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