Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Technology has made children less creative than they were in past | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in past.

In, Status quo, technology had become our third hand and is entangled with us in our every task. Whereas some people think that it had made children more creative, others had opinion that it had resulted kids to become less creative. Personally, I believe that technology had made children less creative than past. i feel this way for two reasons which I will examine in this essay.

First of all, Technology had made children lost in the gadget and had made them introvert. Due to technology, nowadays children fully locked themselves inside their room and do not talk with the any people, even not with their parents. If the children will be fully introvert and do not talk with other people, than they would not be social and would not be able to deal with outer world. They would loose their creativity about how to make conversation with the people outside and would not be able to judge the situation properly. Eventually, this would make them feeble in their mental astuteness. For example, I had my small brother who is fully engaged in technology all the time and be inside his room every time . Once, He had to go to the new city without his gadgets. Than at that time, without his GPS location he had a great problem to reach his destination. Conclusively, He was not as creative before to deal with the people and get to location by his own. Hence, Technology had made his loose his creativity.

Secondly, Too much using of technology can lead the small children to mental disease called autism. As nowadays most of the parents are working parents and they cannot provide much time to look after their children. So, to engage their babies parents provide them smart phones where children continuously get hang on. As a result children’s always look on phones and will not develop their proper responding ability to outer world and leads to autism. Obviously, If the parent would talk and play with their children, they would not have lost their responding ability. This can be best illustrated by my personal experience. There used to my niece who at the small age used to hang on the smart phones every time. His parents do not used to play with him and engage him in any kind of conversation. When he was 2 years old, Than at that age he was caught by autism and weaken to respond quickly and also loose his creativity to deal with things in life.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that technology leads to loose the creativity. This is because the children loose their mental astuteness and will not know about the outer world which is must to be creative.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
... made children less creative than past. i feel this way for two reasons which I w...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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Message: Did you mean 'then'?
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...vert and do not talk with other people, than they would not be social and would not ...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...le to deal with outer world. They would loose their creativity about how to make conv...
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...e time and be inside his room every time . Once, He had to go to the new city with...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ime and be inside his room every time . Once, He had to go to the new city without h...
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...go to the new city without his gadgets. Than at that time, without his GPS location ...
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...his own. Hence, Technology had made his loose his creativity. Secondly, Too much u...
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... conversation. When he was 2 years old, Than at that age he was caught by autism and...
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
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... and weaken to respond quickly and also loose his creativity to deal with things in l...
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...reativity. This is because the children loose their mental astuteness and will not kn...
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Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...not know about the outer world which is must to be creative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, whereas, for example, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65864332604 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44508828918 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45295404814 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5521455875 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.16 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.28 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230541935371 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727555901422 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078075789437 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140586816654 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565082185417 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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