Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teenagers should be encouraged to have jobs while they re still in school Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teenagers should be encouraged to have jobs while they're still in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no shortage of opinions on whether a teenager should be encouraged for jobs while in school. I strongly believe that the teenager should be encouraged for the job. I'll explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, when a teenager has a job they become more responsible and they understand the concept of money. They get an idea about how much it is important and that it should be used properly. Because of working at a young age they tend to become more good at their finances and are good at their expenses. They possess good financial knowledge. I would like to give an example of my elder brother, who started working at an art gallery out of the love which he had towards art during his school times. This job didn't only provided money to him but he also became financially sound and was good at money. Other friends of his age were not as good as he was. And as he was earning a good amount, other than doing expenses and enjoying his life, he was also saving a good amount of money whereas other kids of his age would feel that their pocket money was too less and used to spend all of them. So I think that having a job in teenage makes you financially sound, helps you to manage expenses and also puts a sense of responsibility in you.
Secondly, having a job in school also acts as a helping hand towards your parents and your family. It adds one more earning hand in the family through which there is less burden on the existing bread earners. It also helps to reduce the financial stress that's going in the family by giving them an upper hand of support. I have an example of my friend who was not from a good family background and their financial conditions were not so great that only his parents salaries could fulfill their needs. So my frined decided to possess a job in the nearby shop and support his family through these bad times. He not only earned money and supported his family but he also was able to gain business and financial knowledge through this work. It acted like a boon in disguise for him. So I believe that having a job in the teenage helps your family and gives an additional support by having an extra hand for earning bread.
In conclusion, doing a job in the teenage is good because it makes you financially independent and you are good at your expenses. And also it helps your family by supporting them with the small amount which you get and also reduces the burden on the existing bread earners of the family.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, as to, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41794310722 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33051745702 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435448577681 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2897807475 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7727272727 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7727272727 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235669240696 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084434884546 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741000512115 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182873880743 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745735329786 0.0645574589148 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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