In the modern era, advertisements are regarded as crucial factors contributing to the thriving and popularity of companies. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with their impacts on young children. Many people adhere to the view that they are safe and does not have any adverse effects on kids, while others find them destructive. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that the disadvantages of commercials outweigh their merits for young people. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that kids could easily be manipulated by deceiving ads. When they are exposed to a tv commercial, they will be chanted by the colorful animals and believe whatever that comes out from their little mouths. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I have a little brother who is a huge enthusiast of the commercials. He keeps staring at them for hours and even sings alongside the fictional characters. He trusts these cartoon figures more than his family. Once, they were introducing a bar of expensive chocolate, which the animals flew after eating it. My brother started crying and plead my parents to buy one for him. After he tasted it, he found out that the fake ads fooled him because he could not fly.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that the excessive amount of ads on the television makes the children suppose that they do not have enough toys. When the programs depict happy young boys and girls with tons of toys, our little viewers believe that they will not experience prosperous lives unless they have scores of toys. As a result, the argument with families will be intensified so that they will always blame their parents for not buying their desirable material. For instance, my cousin is an eight-year-old boy. Like my brother, he cares too much about the advertisements. Although he has a plethora of toys, he always seeks different channels for new ones. Sometimes his parents can not afford to buy those expensive objects for him, so he starts crying for days and stops eating food to make them behave as he wants. Thus, not only do the commercials exert financial burden on families, but they also increase conflicts among the members.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that commercials that designed for kids are not beneficial for the community. This is because they deceive them by using interesting figures, and bring extra effort for parents to deal with their children's irrational requests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94407158837 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71458788455 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577181208054 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6179453938 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0833333333 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0765422797581 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0235204082183 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300033032871 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.049786339353 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175262455766 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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