Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, especially in developed countries, people have a great influence on their destiny and can shape the future of their society. While some believe that young people do not have a considerable effect on their society, others think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that young people have a significant influence on the critical decisions that determine their society's future. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, in many countries, youths can take part in the elections, or if not, they can affect their parents' vote in the elections. I mean, there are many countries all over the world that people can vote by the age of fifteen. When young people are allowed to vote, they have a significant influence on their society's future because this is how the governments determine the future. Furthermore, those who are not able to vote yet can significantly affect their parents' votes. Nowadays, parents care about their children so much and listen to them. If children feel that some laws are against them, they can convince their parents to vote against those particular laws. For example, a few years ago, there was an election in my country as to whether the age of driving should be increased to 21 from eighteen. Youths could not participate in that election, but they easily convinced their parents that it is not good for them, and they do not like to wait until 21 for driving. The parents voted against the rule, and the legal age for driving remained eighteen.
Second, thanks to easy access to the internet and social networks, young people have a better connection together and can be unified easily. When the government enacts some rules against them without voting, they will soon be aware of it through the internet. Also, because they are in touch with each other by social networks, they will back each other. Sometimes they can arrange protests and rallies to express their opinions. My example illustrates this reality. About ten years ago, when I was a juvenile, the government wanted to put a rule against the youths. They wanted to ban people under the age of 24 from going to bars. Young people throughout the country became aware of the supposed rule through a few websites on the internet. All youths were against this law and wanted to oppose it. The formed groups on Facebook and communicate about the ways to objects this decision. They finally started a rally against it for two weeks all over the country. They insisted so much that the government had to retreat from its position and did not put that rule.
In conclusion, with this taken into account, I strongly believe that nowadays, young people have great importance on the crucial decisions that determine the future of the society. They can participate in elections or affect those who have the right to vote. Moreover, they get aware of the decisions and express their opinion with the help of now available technologies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 741, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...go, there was an election in my country as to whether the age of driving should be increased ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, while, as to, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85322896282 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5157665142 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463796477495 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6664501074 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5714285714 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89285714286 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14898750299 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462292083665 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664346005237 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127817901838 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757796872423 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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