Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
College students should not be allowed to use electronic devices, such as computers or smart phones, that can be connected to the Internet during the class.
Nowadays, allowing students to use electronic devices during the class has become the top concern of the modern citizens. However, people hold different opinions toward the issue whether college students should be allowed to use electronic devices that can be connected to the Internet in the class. As far as I am concerned, college students should be allowed to use electronic devices in their classes because there are other benefits as follows.
To begin with, college students have their own personal motives of using electronic devices. The pivotal purpose of attending the class is to acquire multifarious knowledge, which makes most students unlikely use the devices to do unrelated things, such as playing online games, chatting through social media, and listening to music, unless those activities are relevant to a particular lesson. According to a survey conducted by the Sociology Department of Peking University, there are 78% of the students who admit that they check their phone for private use mostly about 3 times, and 10% of the students would never open their electronic devices during the class. Also, 85% of the teachers think that electronic devices do not generally have any deleterious influences on the academic behaviors of the learners as most of the students are mature and self-disciplined enough to control themselves. Therefore, this is the primary reason for me advocate that students should be allowed to use the electronic devices can be connected to the Internet in their classrooms.
Additionally, the advent of high-tech electronic devices brings more convenience for college students to review their lessons after their classes. Through the various functions of the electronic devices, students can easily preserve the content of the classes to go over. For instance, I learned the International Civil Law last semester, which was hard for me to understand and was taught by a Belgian teacher, whose pace was too fast for the students to follow. It was essential for each of us to record his lecture by mobile phones, which made us enable to review the pointers that he was saying in the class. The electronic devices were the ones that helped us to pass the exams and have a good command of the knowledge of International Civil Law in order to learn better more efficaciously. Thus, the convenience of reviewing the classes indicates that college students should be allowed to use electronic devices, such as computers or smart phones, in their classrooms.
Admittedly, college students may be seen engrossed in composing a text message, making a phone call, or scrolling through Facebook, which distract them from being concentrated during the class. However, its advantages greatly outweigh its disadvantages. Without electronic devices, students may miss something really urgent that has a great prodigious impact because everyone communicates with each other through the electronic devices nowadays. So after contemplating all the discussions presented above can we maintain that college students should be allowed to use electronic devices that can be connected to the Internet in their classrooms.
To conclude, after weighing all the germane factors, I am confident to maintain that college students should be allowed to use electronic devices, such as computers or smart phones, that accessed to the Internet in their classes. Optimistically, the classrooms will be both salubrious and modern educational places.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 770, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ternational Civil Law in order to learn better more efficaciously. Thus, the convenien...
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Line 4, column 447, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So after” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hrough the electronic devices nowadays. So after contemplating all the discussions prese...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2927.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37064220183 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89283730987 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475229357798 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.0 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6670904341 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.35 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482342047386 0.236089414692 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17655281644 0.076458572812 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136892681556 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324855343396 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605333445687 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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