People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Nowadays, success has become the top concern of modern citizens. However, people hold different viewpoints toward what kind of people can be more successful. As far as I am concerned, people who focus on one skill only can be more successful than people who develop many different skills.
To begin with, focusing on one skill only contributes much to the concentration and patience. Only those who only learn one skill would not be distracted by other subjects and have sufficient time to study further. According to a research conducted by Sociology Department of Peking University, more time one spends on a course, better grade he can achieve. And there are 78% of the university students in Beijing who have selected multifarious courses have little time to improve themselves in each course, thus getting unsatisfactory grades despite of the original enthusiasm to learn the courses well. In contrast, students who only select their major courses could concentrate on their subjects for 8 hours a day, are able to have better academic behavior with a thorough outline and deeply thinking. Thus, I am convinced that people who focus on one skill are more successful than people who develop many different skills.
Additionally, focusing on one skill may have the chance to meet people who are eminent in this field. The continuous effort will bring good luck and golden opportunities, which may help them be successful. Take my uncle Jack for an example, he was major in chemistry when he was in Peking University. Once he attended a speech held by his college, which invited a famous chemistry professor from Cornell University, he asked a question to the professor. The professor was impressed deeply for his intelligence and optimism and gave him a recommendation letter, which helps my uncle get the chance to obtain PhD degree with full scholarship. Nowadays, he is a respected chemistry professor in Peking University and has many excellent students. However, people who develop many different skills may not have the deep thinking to attract those who are eminent in the fields. Accordingly, this is the primary reason for me to advocate that people who focus on skill only are more successful than people who develop many different skills.
Admittedly, it sounds plausible that learning multifarious skills can broaden one’s horizon and increase the knowledge. However, this statement fails to take some more important factors into consideration. People who are successful usually have their unique skills that little people can exceed him, which need long-time concentration and extraordinary chances. When people focus on one skill only, they are more likely to achieve the level to be successful.
To conclude, after weighing these germane factors, I am confident to maintain that people who focus on one skill only can be more successful than people who develop many different skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, in contrast, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2448.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21961620469 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8329883091 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479744136461 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1998287799 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.272727273 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.62610707164 0.236089414692 265% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.22214917262 0.076458572812 291% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.241211565224 0.0737576698707 327% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.456438552349 0.150856017488 303% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980019315939 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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