Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
hen it comes to the problem that educating children today is more difficult than it was in the past, people holds different points of view. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that it is more difficult for parents to teach their children today because of the invention of cell phone and social networking Web site and children spend too much time on them. On the other hand, I think those technology offer another way for parents to teach their children. I feel this way based on my own experience and the reasons is illustrated as below.
To begin with, using social networking Web site helps a child learn to communicate with other children. I believe a well-round development of a children should not be limited on academic knowledge but also social skills. On the social networking Web, children share their feeling and recent events with their peers. And their peers give feedbacks to them. With this trendy communicated tool, children learn how to represent their own ideas with friends and become more confident, especially for those children who get nervous easily when talking with others face to face. Take my sister for example, she used to be a shy kid who has a talent in art. However, when she starts to use facebook to share her drawing with others on the Internet, she becomes happier and willing to express her views. Those feedbacks from friends are also an encouragement for her to create more drawing.
Despit the fact that using cell phone for a long period hurts children's eyes, it is an opportunity to teach children to be responsible for their own behaviors. For example, parents can discuss and make an agreement with children for the length of time they can use cell phones in a day and give some punishment when children break the agreement. Instead of restricting children from using cell phone, it offers a great chance for them to discipline.
In sum, thanks to the development of cell phone and social networking Web parents have another efficient tool to educate their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hen
hen it comes to the problem that educating ...
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Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
...ion of cell phone and social networking Web site and children spend too much time on the...
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Line 1, column 393, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'those technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; those technologies
...ime on them. On the other hand, I think those technology offer another way for parents to teach ...
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
... To begin with, using social networking Web site helps a child learn to communicate with...
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Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
.... I believe a well-round development of a children should not be limited on academic knowl...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hurt'?
Suggestion: hurt
...that using cell phone for a long period hurts childrens eyes, it is an opportunity to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82997118156 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55025805752 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512968299712 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4083352659 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.75 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280650837768 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102251091008 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10364614168 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197553736007 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870791124585 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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