Parents are no doubt to agree that education is a crucial thing for a child when they be mature. However, that is where the agreement stops. When it comes to the problem that new technology such as cell phone is beneficial or harmful to a child, parents hold different points of view. In my opinion, rather than hurting children, those technology offer a new way for parents to teach their children. I feel this way based on my own experience and the reasons is illustrated as below.
To begin with, using social networking Web site helps a child learn to communicate with other children. I believe a well-round development for a children should not be limited on academic knowledge but also social skills. On the social networking Web site, children share their feeling and recent events with their peers. And their peers give feedbacks to them. With this trendy communicated tool, children learn how to represent their own ideas and become more confident, especially for those children who get nervous easily when talking with others face to face. Take my sister for example, she used to be a shy kid who has a talent in art. However, when she starts to use facebook to share her drawing with others on the Internet, she becomes happier and willing to express her views. Those feedbacks from friends are also an encouragement for her to create more drawing.
In addition, despite the fact that using cell phone for a long period hurts children's eyes, it is an opportunity to teach children to be responsible to their own behaviors. For example, parents can discuss and make an agreement with children for how long a day they can use cell phones in a day and give some punishment when children break the agreement. Instead of restricting children from using cell phone, it offers a great chance for them to discipline. Not only cell phone, but also online games, too. Take my brother for example, he made a deal with my father to play online games an hour a day after finishing homework when he was in high school. Because he was obsessed with online games, the first thing he did after school was doing homework. In the end, he graduated high school with the first prize. No one know he won the prize because of online games. So, are you still saying playing online game is bad for a child?
In sum, thanks to the development of cell phone and social networking Web parents have another efficient method to educate their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'those technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; those technologies
... opinion, rather than hurting children, those technology offer a new way for parents to teach th...
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Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
... To begin with, using social networking Web site helps a child learn to communicate with...
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Line 2, column 143, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... I believe a well-round development for a children should not be limited on academic knowl...
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Line 2, column 247, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
...social skills. On the social networking Web site, children share their feeling and recen...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hurt'?
Suggestion: hurt
...that using cell phone for a long period hurts childrens eyes, it is an opportunity to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, well, for example, i feel, in addition, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70491803279 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4814036121 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515222482436 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4665078611 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.347826087 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5652173913 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.60869565217 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24342723854 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766053124337 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571155172873 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152877963847 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391329965974 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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