Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no doubt that parents should reward their children when they are doing great on an exam. However, it is where the agreement stops. When talking about the way to praise their children, parents have different perspective. Some parents give their children money to reward the high scores on an exam. On the other hand, instead of giving them money, some parents inspire their children by offering material satisfaction such as taking them out for a nice dinner or mental compliment. Personally, I advocate the statement to give school-age children money to encourage them, and there are some reasons illustrated below to support my opinion.
To begin with, giving children money help them learn how to make decisions by themselves by utilizing the money and being responsible for it. By doing so, they will have more understanding about the real life sooner in the future. My mother used to tell me that life is made by a serious of choices; choose what you love and love what you choose. For instance, if a child decides to buy something expensive which's price is higher than his parent gave him, he has to study harder to win more money. On the other hand, if another child chooses to buy something she can afford, she may not be able to buy something fancy. Then, she has to take the risk that other children will laugh at her. No matter which choice a child choose, he/she will learn the result from it, and he/she will have more understanding about making a decision wisely in the future.
Moreover, it is a good chance for school-age children to learn the difficulty of earning money and the concept of saving money. Especially, saving money is an essential skill when they grow up. Because we never know what will happen next, so we must save some money for the emergency. I believe to learn as many skills as younger is of benefit to students. Because when they enter a society, they will not have enough time to learn than they do in school. Even they do have time, people are more strict to adults than to students. As a result, parents can educate their children the important of saving money by rewarding them when they do well on the exams as young as possible.
Although some parents argue that children may cheat on an exam to get high scores, I disagree with this statement. I am not saying cheating is tolerant, but students must be clever enough to figure out a tricky way to achieve high grade. On the other hand, don't you think it is also a perfect opportunity to educate children to be honest?
In sum, rather than buying something unnecessary to children or taking them out for dinner, offering children money and teaching them how to use it is a better and more practical way to encourage children.

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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, as to, for instance, no doubt, such as, talking about, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64462809917 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42365147443 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495867768595 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6715683246 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45833333333 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322026477288 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931191600467 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676329076159 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178887344665 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720402648721 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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