Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world. Children are affected by assorted factors is a master key. Many problems like physical and mental can have a big influence on their efficensies. A question, which is the matter of debate, a polemical one, is the effect of new technology like cellphone, net, etc. on education of children’s. Although, it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this matter. I am to great belief that these technologies extremely affected the education of children. The following reasons would be elaborate on this thesis.
To commence, one of the compelling reason that justifies the thesis is about time consuming. To put it in general, when the children use these technologies, they spend much time and they do not have any time for study or another side works. Simply stated, for children that they are in growing age they need to learn many things for future life. they must use their time to increase their knowledge by educating. giving into depth, the majority of children likes online game, but their parents should know that the children needs to study their books. The parents must convince the children to reduce the game playing time and they know that is too hard. To shed more light on this notion, according to the results that published in Elsevier journal, the children spent 3 hours in day on online games. That is horrible for children's education.
alongside with the first reason elaborated in above, the importance of the physical activity due to spending much time on using the net or game, which requires exact attention. To clarify, in the growing age period, the children must have a heath body to progress in their education. To elucidate on, the technology (web, cell phones) don not allow to the children to have enough sport and physical playing. Due to these problems, they do not have energy and freshness to continue the education and fail’s in the exams for this matter. However, what I mention in above might not be over generalized to all contexts. The technology can help the children to learn many education things.
drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions, which are excluded from the general rules, i do agree that the technology like cell phone, net, online games and etc. extremely affected the children’s education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94072164948 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6692807614 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523195876289 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7180835963 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.875 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.625 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22338302156 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632631971133 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407914282811 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133748288722 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372157197722 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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