Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is generally, the amount of dependency of young people on their parents played a pivotal role in mental health during the centuries. Due to its paramount importance, there is a long-standing discussion among people that this dependency is changed or not. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to a great extent on the belief that, in modern life, this dependency was decreased and young people are independence in today's world. In the ensuing paragraphs, I will represent cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justify the thesis is that internet which has profoundly effect on relationship and interaction between the people, especially between young people and their parents. To put it in general words, the Internet and its tools like social networks have huge effects on decision making of children. To elucidate, many clips, forum, information are available on the Internet, also the celebrities that active on this networks navigates the notion of children. Needless to say, celebrities are the idol of children more than parents. To shed more light on the issue, according to a study conducted in my university recently reveals that the internet is the main tool for decision making in 80% of young people.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, another equally noteworthy in corroborating my stance is a modern educational system. In the past, the children did not have effective teaching system and maybe did not have schools. To clarify, in modern schools, the teachers and educational consultants taught the student to makes a proper decision for their life. For instance, they give many book or movies to children. I remember that, when I was in a class in my high school 8 years ago, my geology teacher told me that you should make you decision with studying extra book. However, what I mentioned above might not be overgeneralized to all contexts.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions, which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that, the young people are less dependence on their parents in today's. However, that was the story in a nutshell. In fact, there are a myriad of other reasons, challenging the above claim, which could be mentioned
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, for instance, in fact, in general, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0365535248 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.803372747 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553524804178 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9783272806 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.166666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283571395002 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712302268555 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693225078357 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15283462073 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127657324335 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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