In order to be successful, businesses must put more money in advertising
That in today’s world, businesses are affected by assorted factors in economic successes. Qualities of goods, services and any other things to present to consumers alongside the advertising influence the successful in businesses. A question, which is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether quality of products is a crucial parameter; although, we cannot reach a successful without advertisements. I am, to great extent on the belief that advertisement has a more profound effect on successful in businesses. The following reasons would elaborate on the idea.
To commence, one of the compelling reason that justifies this idea is the people use many tools like television, web, social networks, that businesses can use them to attract their customers. To put it in general word, a good advertisement tool can change the taste of people in other to buy any product, though it has low quality. They can use fascinate clips, music, photos or other effective things that people like them. According to the results of study posted in Elsevier journal, advertisement can increase the success of business to 63%.
Alongside with the first reason elaborate above, many people do not much time to search and select whatever they want to buy, also the majority of people profoundly affected by attracting advertisement. For example, when my Mon seeing the TV, she want everything that showing in many channels. I said to her that is just advertisement and you do not cheated by it, by the way, she told me, I want all of them. However, I mention above might not be generalized to all context. Some people saw many advertisements every day; although, they did not affected by them.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions, which are excluded from the general rule, I agree that more using money on advertisement makes successful in business. To recapitulate the reasons, not companies spend the money on advertisement, but also the amount of money on advertisement also play a significant role in business successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...example, when my Mon seeing the TV, she want everything that showing in many channel...
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Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ments every day; although, they did not affected by them. Drawing upon the reasons, al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for example, in general, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16467065868 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0626869371 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574850299401 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0644504336 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8125 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20348416381 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614740102891 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617068516902 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122432459832 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075573510255 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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