The job market becomes more and more competitive. Students learn abundant skills in school in order to succeed in a future career. Therefore, it comes into a question: the most important ability a student has is networking or hardworking? In my opinion, I would say that the key to success in a future job is studying hard in school.
First, schools create a good environment for students to acquire knowledge with intelligent scholars and genius students. In order not to waste such a great opportunity, students should endeavor to study. In addition, the only one way to become an expert in the major we choose is based on the solid understanding of foundation. The experts are far less then the number of people who have an excellent communication skills. What's more important is, when a company try to develop an outstanding product, experts are needed while the man equips with great networking are not.
Moreover, as a man who just graduated from school, interviewers do not expect he has any work experience to show his talent. So, what will the interviewers do? The answer is the interviewers will check the man's GPA at school. GPA is a clear and obvious reference for interviewers. As a result, students must work as hard as possible to get a higher GPA in school. Take myself for example, when I applied for an internship in the best IC design house in my country, the man works in the human resource department told me that applicants whose GPA is under 3.5 will not get the opportunity to interview. Since most of the students majored in engineering will apply for the internship the interview is rival. Thanks to my hardworking at school, I got the internship.
Although some people may argue that the ability to relate well to people is essential to work as a team. However, I disagree with this statement. I think students should have a fair ability to communicate with other and they can improve this ability while working. I believe people can learn better once they really have to negotiate and work with others.
In conclusion, according to the reasons proposed above, to become successful in a future job, studying hard in school is definitely the key.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 354, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...of foundation. The experts are far less then the number of people who have an excell...
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Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...have an excellent communication skills. Whats more important is, when a company try t...
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Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...orking at school, I got the internship. Although some people may argue that the ability ...
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Line 4, column 293, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ile working. I believe people can learn better once they really have to negotiate and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80533333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82158536996 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4601793609 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9090909091 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270077037189 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768041646245 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593431831434 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158027138322 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062852103586 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.