Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The job market becomes more and more competitive. Students learn abundant skills in school in order to succeed in a future career. Therefore, it comes into a question: the most important ability a student has is networking or hardworking? In my opinion, I would say that the key to success in a future job is studying hard in school.
First, schools create a good environment for students to acquire knowledge with intelligent scholars and genius students. In order not to waste such a great opportunity, students should endeavor on studying. Hard working makes a student become an expert in a specific field.
Moreover, as a man who just graduated from school, interviewers do not expect he has any work experience to show his talent. So, what will the interviewers do? The answer is the interviewers will check the man's GPA at school. GPA is a clear and obvious reference for interviewers. As a result, students must work as hard as possible to get a higher GPA in school. Take myself for example, when I applied for an internship in the best IC design house in my country, the man works in the human resource department told me that applicants whose GPA is under 3.5 will not get the opportunity to interview. Since most of the students majored in engineering will apply for the internship the interview is rival. Thanks to my hardworking at school, I got the internship.
Although some people may argue that the ability to relate well to people is essential to work as a team. However, I disagree with this statement. I think students should have a fair ability to communicate with other and they can improve this ability while working. I believe people can learn better once they really have to negotiate and work with others.
In conclusion, according to the reasons proposed above, to become successful in a future job, studying hard in school is definitely the key.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...orking at school, I got the internship. Although some people may argue that the ability ...
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Line 4, column 293, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ile working. I believe people can learn better once they really have to negotiate and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81424148607 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82058126463 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560371517028 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9585031592 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.75 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.15 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280533716115 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830761972125 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585011257873 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159246266718 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613275716592 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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