Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it talks about the most important ability for a student to have a better career, people have different aspects. Some people believe that students should make a great effort on study. Others think that having a great relation to people is more essential. Personally, I think the second ability is more important. I feel this way based on my own experience.
At first, let's define the meaning of success in a future job. I will like to define it as making a myriad of money. Enough money make our lives become easier. Nowadays, the job market become more and more competitive and time is hard. People endeavor to earn as much money as possible. However, despite the high salary a hard-working student may have in the future, getting a fixed salary is definitely not the way to become success, or rich. On the other hand, having the ability to relate well help a man to get some critical information to success.
Moreover, hard-working is just one of the basic factor to make a man survive in this hard time. Take our ancestor for example, working hard to learn some skills in school today is just like our ancestors learning how to hunt and forge. I believe the most important reason that human becomes one of the greatest species is we learn to negotiate and colabrate with others. On the other words, people should keep a good relation with others. Working as a team makes our society develop. And there is one say, the success of a community brings more profits to individuals.
In conclusion, to make more money and bsuccess on career, I think there is no doubt that having a great ability to relate well to people is more important to a student.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: WILL_LIKE_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'would'?
Suggestion: would
...e meaning of success in a future job. I will like to define it as making a myriad of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61694915254 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48452608458 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515254237288 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7975782435 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6842105263 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231995717401 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711337025454 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507735492091 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151388568448 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182782627708 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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