Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many ways for parents to reward their children when they are doing great in school. Some parents give their children money to reward the high scores. On the other hand, instead of giving them money, some parents inspire their children by taking them out for a nice dinner. Personally, I prefer to give shool-age children to encourge them. There are some reasons illustrated below to support my opinion.
To begin with, giving children money help them accustom the real life in the future. My mother used to tell me that life is made by a serious of choices; choose what you love and love what you choose. Children can learn how to make decisions by themselves by using the money to buy stuff and be responsible to them. For instance, if a child decides to buy something expensive which's price is higher than his parent gave him, he has to study harder to win more money. On the other hand, if another child choose to buy something she can afford, she may not be able to buy something fancy. Then, she has to take the risk that other children will laugh at her. No matter which choice a child choose, he will learn the result from it.
Even though some parents argue that school-age children
Moreover, it is a good chance for school-age students to learn the concept of saving. Saving money is an essential skill when they grow up. Because we never know what will happen next, so we must save some money for emergency. I believe to learn as many skills as younger is of benefit to students. Because when they enter a society, they will not have time to learn. Even they do have time, people are more strict to grownup than to students. As a result, parents can educate their children the improtant of saving by rewarding them when they do well on the exams.
In sum, rather than buying something unnecessary to children or taking them out for dinner, offering children money and teaching them how to it is a better and more pratical way to encourage children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, then, well, as to, for instance, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56056338028 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26686892066 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52676056338 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5902650988 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.95 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294006128348 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949738173721 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799462766045 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188455197442 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823798652715 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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