Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, young children almost depended on older people to make a decision. Bypassing time, the condition changed and they became the most independent. Although some groups of people hold an opposite view and they claim, the juveniles are not able to make the decision yet, some strongly disagree. From my perspective, the idea od the first group seems more correct. I will elaborate on my points of view in the subsequent paragraphs cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that young people respected more to older in the past. Hence, they preferred to be silent in front of their parents and their ideas because it might be impolite behavior, especially in traditional families. Although bypassing the time and changing the culture of society, they recognize that it is their right to decide for their life, some individuals continue the old fashioned way still. For instance, my mother says in the past, they were not allowed to have a particular job and separated their family since it has a terrible view.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that nowadays communication has been developed and youths could take fress information about how they can reach their goals. Therefore, it strongly helps them not only do take the decisions by themselves but also achieve greater success. Without the development of technology has precipitated these much of independency. On top of that the results of the study on Tehran University, one of the most prestigious universities in my country, revealed that how much the connection of juveniles increased with the other world people they get more confident, they are enough mature to decide bout their lives. However, the limited knowledge and communication with the rest of the world confide the youths to their families and being dependent.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that today by promoting the levels of international communications and altering the traditions and culture of society, the young people seem more sure about their ability to point their fate by deciding about their own lives. Consequently, the country will not have a more powerful force if did not let them decide by themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, for instance, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16393442623 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85796137224 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571038251366 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.449489203 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.125 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294895477389 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831933505945 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678961422605 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171236308223 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247044820356 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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