Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
young individuals are a crucial part of our society. As over time, all traditions and customs have changed significantly and it creates a lot of problems between youth and older who experienced different situations. Some people believe that today's young people decide on their parent's thought dependently, while others hold an opposite view and assert that in the past youth's parents interfere in their decision directly. In my opinion, now young people do not rely on their parent when they want to make decisions about their own lives for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that now by arriving advancement technology such as social networking and internet all youth are more informed about their need rather than their parents. In the past, children who had not any way to get knowledge involved all their time with parents such as how to do or eat that caused parents to habit to take decision for their children. In contrast, now all young children deal with website and learn how to make decision better. For instance, when I was in high school, I wanted to choose mechanic major for university. I could obtain valuable information about which major would have beneficial for me. Fortunately, my father accepted my decision quickly because he was upset his works which his mother had forced to pursue. he believed that in the past because of lack of any website and internet he conceded thought of his parent. Lucky, as over time, I could become the best engineer in the world due to the fact I made decision myself.
Another reason is that now parents are more open-mind and allow young individuals make decision alone. In the past, unfortunately, older people had a tenacity thought about children and force them to do everything that lead their children to face serious issues in the future, whereas now by increasing the level of knowledge of old persons they do not intervene in their youth. For instance, my aunt got married about 40 years ago when she was only 13 years old. she really liked to follow her studying in order to become teacher. Notwithstanding her father thought that girls should got married before arriving at 14 years old. As over time, she never could follow her wish and now is very frustrated about it. Consequently, now she allows her children to make decision for their lives because of her experience. This experience taught me that now parent who are open-mind want not to interfere their children's decision.
In conclusion, now parents do not interfere in decision of their children while in the past youth could not make decision themselves for their lives because now parents are more open-mind and also by advent technology children are more informed. All parents should allow to their young children to make decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, really, so, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98933901919 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56775560061 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46908315565 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8704916313 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.363636364 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365147575415 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116336778816 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991211649755 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268412287021 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574962835752 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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