Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Thanks to the invention of the Internet, people are connected together and able to learn global news immediately. When it comes to the controversial problem whether or not to learn news happened around the world, people hold different opinions. Some people advocate it is important to know about events happening in other countries. Others dispute that news has no effect on our daily life. Personally, I agree with the first one based on the following reasons.
First, knowing events in other countries help you interact and communicate with foreigners more smoothly. Have you ever got a chance to talk to a foreigner but your brain is totally blank? The news in the foreigner's country becomes good materials. In addition, it makes people be respected to you because you are interested in their culture and country. Take my father for example, he went on a business trip to Mexico for 3 months. Before he went there, he brought a lot of grocery to Mexico, because he knew the tragic earthquake just killed thousands of Mexican and hundreds of building collapsed. This kind and generous behavior help him get a great deal. So are you still saying it is unrelated to your life? I don't think so, instead, it may be important to your career more than you think.
Second, learning news around the world enlarges our view. We can learn history and cultures from other countries. Moreover, the experience from other countries may help the development of our community. For example, China used to be a conservative country. Chinese are not allowed to say bad things about their government. Because of the Internet, they learn democracy from other countries by watching the voting news in a liberal country such as the United State. Therefore, I think it is important to the progress of a country.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I think it is essential and beneficial to a person to know about events happening around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...n it comes to the controversial problem whether or not to learn news happened around the world...
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Line 2, column 466, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun grocery seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of groceries'.
Suggestion: a lot of groceries
...onths. Before he went there, he brought a lot of grocery to Mexico, because he knew the tragic e...
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Line 2, column 716, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... saying it is unrelated to your life? I dont think so, instead, it may be important ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89090909091 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6982904495 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.43638341 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.3636363636 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232590005782 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646621651036 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650094515722 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150813918569 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059912361103 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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