Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.Use specific reasons and examples to support

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

First point I would like to make is, possibility of doing my works. The most important of them is my education in economics. One of the most important things in my life is my education in the economic. So, because I can continioe this work which is one of my bests in my life, I will choose to go to the work just three days during week.

Another point I would like to make is, my desire calass in learning of music instument. One of my dreams is learning of the piano, aside of my profetional live. And if I have a free time during the week, I can go to it' s class and do it 's practices. Because I can reach to of my dreams by this way, I will choose this way of go to work.

Finally, because I have a lot of daily problems in my life, it is very plesuable for me to go to the vacation. On the other hand, I love going to the trips. Since this choice make it accessable to me to go countryside, It is my best choise for my future job.

At the end, there are some many people who will choose five days working, but it is very hard for me to work a lot during a week. The work is not my entire purpose at this point of my life and it is just a instrument for me to help me for reaching my gouls.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 956.0 1977.66487455 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 248.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 3.85483870968 4.8611393121 79% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27956355244 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 212.727598566 53% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 315.9 618.680645161 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2908940749 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.5384615385 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126083141389 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534333079251 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551230360193 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922951891489 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338749041786 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 11.7677419355 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 5.05 10.9000537634 46% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.17 8.01818996416 77% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 86.8835125448 29% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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