Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than
positive effects on the way young people behave.
In the modern era, media has a prominent role in every individual's life. It is highly accepted that people spend a considerable amount of their free time to watch television and movies. There has been a long debate among scholars about the side effects of the television and movies on young people behavior. different aspects of this phenomena have been scrutinized and highly skilled people have argued over this subject. As far as I am concerned, I agree that movies and TV have a more negative effect on the way that young people behave. In what follows two elaborate reasons will vindicate my point of view.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that TV and movies are filled with violence and horror scenes. This can lead to agression on youngesters and push them towards anxiety and stress. Because media owners are trying to get more income through more audience , they try to make films and shows as exciting as possible and this is done by adding violence and action scene to shows. A recent study is conduct by a group of students in harvard university has examined 400 young people and their behaviour over six month. A group of them were taken to a cinema on weekly bases to action and science fiction movies and also asked to watch a TV show every night at home. Another group was asked not to watch any movies or TV shows during the research time. The result of aggresion and violence test among the first group was much more higher. It shows that being in the enviornement close to movies and shows have a negative effect on young people.
The second noteworthy point to mention is that watching TV shows and movies turn young people to radical consumer of unneseccery goods and services. Such films and shows push young people towards shopping things they wouldn't want on normal lifestyle. Youngesters inspired by celebrities tend to buy expensive brands and this will infulence their families two. Take a personal experience as an example. My little sister was a huge movie fan and always followed celebrities on instagram and youtube. She was obsessed by them and was mimicing their fashion style. After a while she ran out of money because of expensive and unnessecery goods she purchased.
In conclusion i believe that Tv and movis has a negative effect on young people not only because it promotes violince and horror, but also because it turns them into radical consumer of unwanted products. I recommend that authurties control the release of television programs and Movies so that people have a good life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79498861048 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45690017524 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519362186788 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4594424661 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5217391304 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34782608696 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299341615129 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083272712051 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107773918242 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198323765656 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100905345628 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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