Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Since dawn of humanity, parents stimulate their children to attempt for having better life. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that their knowledge and advice to children facilitate paving the way toward the success. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that beside studying hard at school, taking part-time job is useful for children to ready for complex world when they will be mature. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, acquiring a lot of experiences and improving social skills could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however regarding the importance of having experience before trying some activities, based on the statistics of different general questionnaires of sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that working provides some valuable experiences which increase the chance of finding a proper job in the future; moreover, it could broaden children's horizon for their future choices. For instance, when they work in some workplaces, they will be familiar with them and this obtained knowledge help them to choose cleverly their field in the universities. Furthermore, they will learn some technique and details about their work. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University's graduate students unveiled the fact that about 85 percent of students have the tendency being professional in the jobs which they done in the part-time jobs in the past. These results show the effect of the part-time job on students for preparing them in the future.
In addition to the reason raised above; boosting social skills could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, the ability to make a relationship with other has the paramount effect on the worker's success in her or his job. This ability could prosper in the children by trying some part-time job. They could get the enough teaching for how to behave and interact with other in workplaces. Indeed, they should be consistent with other workers for promoting their career and satisfying their managers. In addition, this opportunity improves other personal skills such as being responsible. It helps them to accept their faults and trying to correct them. For instance, last year, I worked in a Pizza shop as a cashier. I was shy before the starting this job but I must talk with different people and workers to provide a good service for them. It helps me to be social and interact with other without any fear.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that teenage children could prepare for the future life by attempting to do some part-time job. Not only it increases their experience but also thrives their social skills to interact with other people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04263565891 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68054292597 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.763623935 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.130434783 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4347826087 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269760492157 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831981164065 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507844426028 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180345803685 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146736293509 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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