Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that charity institutes have a paramount role in societies to help poor people for having a good life. Annually some famous celebrity and rich people donate a lot of money to these organizations for providing food, house, borrowing money establishing small businesses and medicine. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that donating money to some organization which distributing among people for establishing some small businesses is more beneficial for societies in comparison with other options. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, providing new job chances for other poor people and improvement of the economy of the societies could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the providing job for people to being needless of other people’s help, based on the statistics of different general questionnaires of sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that people could hire new poor people when their own businesses begin; moreover, these employees could obtain their need by working in these new jobs. They could prepare food, house, and medicine for their families without any donating. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate students unveiled that if Iran’s government advocate about 100 million dollars in start-up organization about 8500 persons could employ in 250 work center. These results show the importance of the new businesses in omitting poor people which could establish by other people who need money for starting.
In addition to the reason raised above; the rule of omitting jobless people by providing the job for them in the economy of countries could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, these new businesses could get services to the people by addressing new production or services. These activities prosper the roots of progress in the societies and the rate of jobless people could reduce significantly. For instance, when some small company starts to work for production some small electronic devices, many people find the opportunity for getting a job; furthermore, these product use by other big companies and they will provide their basic needs by purchasing small companies’ productions. These will improve the economy of the societies.
Drawing upon of the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that donating money to some organization for establishing some new small businesses and employing other poor people are the best method for helping them. Not only it makes the job for these poor people and makes them independence of other’s helps but also it could improve the economic state of the countries.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...e for having a good life. Annually some famous celebrity and rich people donate a lot of money t...
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Line 2, column 393, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... these employees could obtain their need by working in these new jobs. They could...
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Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...rtunity for getting a job; furthermore, these product use by other big companies and they wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2625.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27108433735 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92118159008 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512048192771 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.37814317 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 154.411764706 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2941176471 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203634334367 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800305913067 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535100244723 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143261498717 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03832714497 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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