Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, By developing the technology there is at least one computer in each home. I absolutely agree with the idea that playing computer games can waste our times and it is our duty to avoid children from this type of games.
First, most of the computer games that teenagers are very enthusiasim about that is the games that about the criminal or war. This game categories have negative effects on children's behaviors. For example, about two month age when i was studynig about crucial people that under arrest in the Iran, i saw a very interesting news that state that about fifthy percents of the prisoners were computer games lover.
Second, most of the computer games in the market have significant effects on primary schools laziness. I saw a TV program about negative aspects of the computer games on students progressive. The scientist found uot that by playing computer, two hours per day, students average grades are plunge gradually about ten percents. and the studies showed that after one month that all students were avoided from playing the games, dramatic increase were showed on average grades.
Third, sitting on a chair and playing a computer for a long rime have bad effects on children physical health. todays, most of the students wear eyegalsses. Another study about students eyesight states that there are many harmful rays on the computer screen such as X-ray and gamma-ray that reduce eyesight in childrens.
To summarize, I think thas it is a fantastic idea that we will do for our children to save them from physical and mental diseases.
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Essay evaluation report
most of the computer games that teenagers are very enthusiasim about that is the games that about the criminal or war.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
This game categories have negative effects
These game categories have negative effects
Sentence: First, most of the computer games that teenagers are very enthusiasim about that is the games that about the criminal or war.
Error: enthusiasim Suggestion: enthusiasm
Sentence: For example, about two month age when i was studynig about crucial people that under arrest in the Iran, i saw a very interesting news that state that about fifthy percents of the prisoners were computer games lover.
Error: studynig Suggestion: studying
Error: fifthy Suggestion: fifty
Sentence: The scientist found uot that by playing computer, two hours per day, students average grades are plunge gradually about ten percents. and the studies showed that after one month that all students were avoided from playing the games, dramatic increase were showed on average grades.
Error: uot Suggestion: out
Sentence: Third, sitting on a chair and playing a computer for a long rime have bad effects on children physical health. todays, most of the students wear eyegalsses.
Error: eyegalsses Suggestion: eyeglasses
Sentence: Another study about students eyesight states that there are many harmful rays on the computer screen such as X-ray and gamma-ray that reduce eyesight in childrens.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
Sentence: To summarize, I think thas it is a fantastic idea that we will do for our children to save them from physical and mental diseases.
Error: thas Suggestion: than
flaws:
No. of Words: 264 350
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 264 350
No. of Characters: 1276 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.153 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.687 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... For example, about two month age when i was studynig about crucial people that ...
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Line 2, column 298, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...l people that under arrest in the Iran, i saw a very interesting news that state ...
^
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...gative aspects of the computer games on students progressive. The scientist found uot th...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...re plunge gradually about ten percents. and the studies showed that after one month...
^^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Todays
...ad effects on children physical health. todays, most of the students wear eyegalsses. ...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'thus', 'at least', 'for example', 'i think', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.291666666667 0.229887763892 127% => OK
Verbs: 0.128472222222 0.158761421928 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104166666667 0.0866891130778 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0243055555556 0.046263068375 53% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0347222222222 0.0685040099705 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.166666666667 0.118717715034 140% => OK
Participles: 0.0347222222222 0.0351676179071 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47971279606 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0104166666667 0.0309702414327 34% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0972222222222 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00694444444444 0.0209618222197 33% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0104166666667 0.0139019557991 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1567.0 2387.08602151 66% => OK
No of words: 264.0 408.028673835 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.93560606061 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48200974243 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348484848485 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284090909091 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19696969697 0.174417080927 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0909090909091 0.112833075102 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47971279606 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 55.8420652976 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3076923077 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8972902966 48.84282405 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.538461538 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.644075263715 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 48.7167832168 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 2.62962962963 1.45489161554 181% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0876469262611 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0710825326799 0.0752933317313 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.605359677188 0.497263757937 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.212424644062 0.151897553556 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.294583387603 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.143983740195 0.067059652881 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8870967742 42% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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