Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that human efforts' is limited and it is quite an unrealistic view by someone who thinks that they should become an expert person in a variety of works. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that human capacity is unlimited people can obtain everything through hard working and good planning. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that because people are busy doing many different things, they do very few things well.
First and foremost, today we can see that some people are breaking under huge tasks and responsibilities they provide for themselves. The wish of achieving high wealth lead to most people working in several different places. Nonetheless, this high working time decreases their concentration, energy and efficiency. Unfortunately, these people are not successful in their personal and social relationships. They are not very good parents, and their children are not happy and emotionally health like other children. In addition, these people present under risk of mental and physical disorder more than usual people.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that today parents create enormous pressure on children in order to make super-intelligent children. For example, in my country Iran, parents full fill all of their children times with different educational programs, such as extra school works, sports and music classes. They force children to participate in all of them without even ask about their interest. Nevertheless, it is substantiated that these kinds of pressure not only have not any benefits for children talents, but also lead to their disgust from learning. Furthermore, it can increase criminal behaviors and addiction in teenage children.
Finally, yet importantly, failures in some tasks would damage people personality and their self-confidence. In my opinion failure in our duty have been the hardest experience for all of us. Involving in many different duties is like picking up several apples by one hand, and it is obviously impossible. In this way, in long-term, we will become discouraged and hopeless. I believe that we should just choose a few specific interesting works and try to be best on them.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that because people are busy to doing money different things, they do very few things well. Because of its time pressure and mental pressure is out of enduring, and a lot of children problems caused by force for doing as much as possible activities and also falling in these tasks can destroy people self-confidence.
- TPO-39- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 71
- TPO 40 61
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 75
- TPO 47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 63
- Do agree or disagree? when teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 441, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...idea that because people are busy doing many different things, they do very few things well. ...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...h wealth lead to most people working in several different places. Nonetheless, this high working ...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... experience for all of us. Involving in many different duties is like picking up several apple...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, well, for example, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23764705882 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88525664064 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567058823529 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3298221023 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253418195014 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738124137102 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140797882126 0.0737576698707 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155778088149 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124720293822 0.0645574589148 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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