Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people think that scientists make the most important contributions to society. Other think that the contributions of artists are the most important. Which positions do you agree with?
Generally, both artists and scientists play important roles in the development of our society. We work or live in beautiful buildings. We hang paintings and pictures in our houses. We also use scientific devices such as mobile phones, laptops, motorbikes and refrigerators every day. Therefore, it is quite hard to determine which one is more crucial. If needed to choose in view of society, I believe scientists gain more respect and money for several reasons.
To begin with, the contributions of scientists are quite obvious. People have to use cars, motorbikes, bikes, buses to work or study every day. Refrigerators, laptops, mobile phones and many other devices have become a part of our lives for a long time. Moreover, different types of food can be grown in anywhere, regardless of the environment. More diseases are cured to help people live longer, healthier thanks to modern machines, scientific devices. These are a few reasons why we cannot deny the necessary works of scientists to society.
Additionally, some people argue that art is a record of past events via ideography, which lifts our spirits. Artists also create the basic foundation for scientific fields such as writing systems, graphs, pictures. Scientists, however, are needed to create complete machines. Furthermore, it is not easy to appraise the true value of pictures and paintings but we can estimate how much scientists make due to the effectiveness of their innovations to human beings. Therefore, they easily make more money. I can recall a compelling example of my friend who graduated from college with a degree in art. She then had to work for a scientific company because it is not always easy to find good jobs in art.
In conclusion, I believe it is very easy to find news regarding a variety of scientific fields which are obtained more funds from the governments than artistic ones to expand their benefits for our future. Consequently, scientists get more and more support and become more vital for our society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g paintings and pictures in our houses. We also use scientific devices such as mob...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...s and paintings but we can estimate how much scientists make due to the effectivenes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07854984894 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87872766249 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1029287953 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0476190476 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7619047619 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116804162597 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368520782442 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441548420789 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728453117952 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198203995314 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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