Do you agree or disagree with the following statements
The opinions of the celebrities, like the entertainers, or the famous athletes,are more important to the younger people than to the older people?
In modern era celebrities have the great importance in most people? A controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is that famous people like athletes, entertainers are effective in young people than older people. In my perspective, I firmly believe that famous people are more important in young people than older one. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that young people have not stationary character and they always search for a new role model. Although this matter may have some disadvantages, for instance, most teenagers pay attention more to the celebrity and they may lose their self-esteem due to they want to imitate their behavior. Take a personal experience as an example, when I was young I really like to be famous athletes and win the Olympics game. Sometimes later, I really like to be a famous scientist like Marry Query or Albert Einstein, also I like to be a rap musician and I am one of the fan o famous group in my country. When I backed to the past, I wonder why I have not a stationary character. On the other hand, when I ask my husband he said me that he had the same situation. Take a personal experience as an example I think most of the people experience the same situation. Therefore we cannot ignore the significant and undeniable role of reputed people in one' life.
Another equally noteworthy point in supporting my opinion is that juveniles have more free time than an adult. There Is a link between age and having a leisure time and attention to the celebrities. To illustrate, I would like to mention some available statistics about this issue. The result of a survey conducted recently in our country reveals that 76 percent of juvenile tend to choose a famous or some celebrities as the role model for themselves. They tend to spend more time for watching movies, hearing music or up-to-date bands who have recently publish their arts. The result can easily support the statement mentioned above, the more people tend to pay attention to the entertainment, and the more they obtained effect from them. To make a long story it is reasonable that celebrities have more effect on young age period.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first one which crosses the mind at first glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. Actually, there is another subtle point which must be bored in mind is the age celebrities effect. The result of a study conducted in my country indicates that the age celebrities effect appear to the people who are in the same age of celebrities. Throughout their invaluable study, it has been substantiated that psychologist found that the age of celebrities is one of the most important factors which can effect on peoples. It is confirmed that if famous people are less than 35, they can have a better effect on young' attitudes.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that we cannot ignore the most important effect of famous behaviors juvenile. Consequently, it is highly recommended that government tries to pay more attention to the celebrities, and aware them how they can effect on the fate of some people who may not know what they want to do in future.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'for instance', 'i think', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21568627451 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.15522875817 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.109477124183 0.0866891130778 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424836601307 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0735294117647 0.0685040099705 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114379084967 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0261437908497 0.0351676179071 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81429851212 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0326797385621 0.0309702414327 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.102941176471 0.0887237588012 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0212418300654 0.0209618222197 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0212418300654 0.0139019557991 153% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3289.0 2387.08602151 138% => OK
No of words: 563.0 408.028673835 138% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84191829485 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333925399645 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229129662522 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175843694494 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142095914742 0.112833075102 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81429851212 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454706927176 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.9997170643 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.6538461538 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.043579812 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 120.699889404 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6538461538 20.5533526081 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 44.5668124061 45.7405998639 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.31325301205 1.45489161554 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.553502001107 0.300154397459 184% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130091569091 0.103427244359 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0921740348564 0.0752933317313 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.502673946243 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132522924265 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205724208482 0.114077575197 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105409916603 0.0781384742642 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407389631776 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0841756463488 0.067059652881 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.386178598925 0.210909579961 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380475507905 0.0618886996521 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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