Nowadays, many people tend to maintain their friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time and think that the ability to maintain friendships is more important for happiness than making new friends. However, I firmly believe that the ability to making new friends is more significant.
First of all, hanging out with new friends is more interesting whereas old friends could be boring because you have already known them very well. A new friend is very likely to have some special characteristics and stories that you never met or heard of before. For instance, a friend of mine named Tom is from Italy. Before I met him, I have never met anyone from Italy. Tom often told me interesting stories of Italy which I never heard of. I found these story extremely interesting and hanging out with Tom was a wonderful experience. On the contrary, when I am chatting with old friends, I find there is nothing new to talk about, which really makes me bored. Thus, I think the ability to make many new friends easily is of more significance for happiness.
Secondly, new friends are more likely to have the ability to help you. Take me for an example, I am now a graduate student and many of my old friends don't even make it to the universities. When I face a problem during my research, my old friends are not able to help me even though they want to. However, my new friends are also graduate students and I can tell them my problem and they are often very helpful. Furthermore, according to a recent survey conducted by Japan Social university, 95% of the respondents reported that their new friends helped them more than their old friends did.
In conclusion, the ability to make new friends easily is more significant for happiness than the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time. On one hand, hanging out with a new friend is often more interesting because there are many new topics to talk about. On the other hand, new friends are more likely to have the ability to help you.
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 61
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.Use specific reasons and ex 60
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 68
- In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...tend to maintain their friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time and t...
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Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time and think that the ability to maintain ...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this story' or 'these stories'?
Suggestion: this story; these stories
...f Italy which I never heard of. I found these story extremely interesting and hanging out w...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...uate student and many of my old friends dont even make it to the universities. When ...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time. On o...
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Line 7, column 172, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time. On one hand, hanging out with a new fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62021857923 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55470325172 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437158469945 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.629510527 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9444444444 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416814287741 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156823675548 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166067541222 0.0737576698707 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347933905816 0.150856017488 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188738134487 0.0645574589148 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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