In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

No one can deny that young people more or less depend on their parents when they are making decisions. However, It is my firm belief that young people today are more capable to make their own decisions than young people in the past.

To begin with, young people in the past lacked life experience whereas young people today can obtain as much life experience as they want readily on the internet, which helps young people today to make their life choices. For example, 30 years ago, my father, who just graduated from high school, was thinking about what major to study. There was no way for him to know those majors based on his own personal life experience. Besides, at that time, little information about what kinds of people should choose what major was available out there. The only thing my father could do was to listen to my grandparents. However, when I was trying to determine my major 3 years ago. I could easily just google the name of a major and numberless information came out on my screen. Furthermore, I could also talk with people who had already in one major and ask how did they feel about their majors. The information online and life experience of people online were extremely beneficial for me to make a decision on my major.

Secondly, young people in the past were expected to be listening to their parents several decades ago, however, young people today are much encouraged to make decisions by themselves. For instance, my uncle loved and wanted to marry a woman whose parents was not as good as my grandparents financially. Because of that, my grandparents didn't allow my uncle to marry that woman and forced him to marry another woman he had never met before. In the past, parents' word worked like order because of some historical culture. Therefore, young people at that time depended on their much very much when they were making decisions.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people today have better capability to make their own decisions but young people in the past were more likely to do things according to the advice from their parents. On one hand, young people in the past had little information to refer to, however, many information is accessible for young people today based on which they can make proper decisions. On the other hand, young people today are encouraged to be responsible for their own lives whereas young people in the past were expected to listen to their parents.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, more or less, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77122641509 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43400682824 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452830188679 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7948231081 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.473684211 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63157894737 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51884174961 0.236089414692 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186394662543 0.076458572812 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172869808334 0.0737576698707 234% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405767409558 0.150856017488 269% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115563960321 0.0645574589148 179% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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