Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern societies could easily be distinguished from ancient ones by contemplating speeds. Advancements in science and technology have forced everything in our day-to-day life to adopt a fast-paced culture. This allowed individuals to be in a constant movement from place to place. Students move out of their small towns to pursue higher education in big cities.As a result, people who have the ability to make new friends quickly and easily would have better opportunities. However, other people who do not have this talent could suffer if they found themselves in a totally new place where they knew no one. Nevertheless, this does not guarantee that out-going individuals will always be happier than more introverted persons. Hence, I disagree with the idea that happiness is related to how easily you are able to make friends rather than how you are able to maintain long-term relationships with the existing friends you already have. I feel this way for many potential reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, we are happier when we have stable relationships for a long time with people. The more trust we have in our friendships, the happier we will be. As trust takes quite long periods of time to build between partners or friends, long-term relationships are the way to change our lives to be more content. This is because time is crucial to prove or disprove the genuity and the significance of each relationship we have. Through years and years of experience together, we can trust each others' honesty. My own experience is a compelling example on that. One of my best friends is Mark. We got to know each other during middle school. After that, we started to share everything about each other. We went on trips together and we've been through good and bad things. This gave us chance to believe in each other and in our relationship since confidence between each other was building day after day.
Secondly, we will not be afraid to be ourselves with a friend whom we have known for long time. This is mainly due to the fact that we have shared enough personal details with each other that there is almost no insecurities to make us uncomfortable. On the other hand, we usually approach new persons in our lives with cautiousness. we do not feel completely comfortable and relaxed around them our attitude towards each other is still taking shape.Therefore, It's not easy for us to be vulnerable around new people. Consequently, we could try to brand ourselves in a certain way which does not reflect our true identity. For instance, I have made many new friendships with my coworkers at my new job, but our relationships are still growing. I cannot rely on them when I feel depressed or unhappy. Rather, I mostly contact my friends from high school whom we have known each other for years. These are the friendships that could make me lead and maintain a joyful life.
In conclusion, although the trait of being outgoing and able to make new friends easily is vital when moving through the stages of life, it's not the authentic key to happiness. Instead, long-term relationships are the ones that saves us when things go wrong.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86372007366 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76733756998 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504604051565 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7263407351 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.03333333333 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22342504749 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567491266046 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603691264132 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137517355777 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601742883764 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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