Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendship with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends?
There is no doubt that nowadays, friendship plays the key role in our society. No one can deny the direct or indirect effect of the friendship in our lives. Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is vital for happiness. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that the ability to make new friends easily is overweight the other one. From my own perspective, the second belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint my outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that by making new friends, we have the chance to learn new things from them. No one can cast a shadow doubt of the fact that some of ideas which brought success and happiness for some people, has been taken from their learning from their friends. As an example, in my own experience, I heard a bad news about my major two years ago. I was told that I cannot ensue my education in my country for PHD since, there were not enough equipment in our universities to cover all students' need. On that time I felt frustrated and thought that I never can do what I love most which is research. However, on that time I found someone who most people may call him a gift from a god. He became my best friend. One day I talked to him about my concern and he offered me to try to complete my study abroad. That was a turn point in my life. This experience taught me the more friends you make, the more new things u can learn.
The last but not the least reason by which claim is justified is that by making new friends you can improve your self-confidence and learn how to socialize more effectively. In other word, people who have the ability to find new friends easily, can earn the experience of how behave with different people. This experience may be useful for them and lead them to have a happier life. For instance, Amir, one of my friend was too shy to talk to girls. After some years he could find a job at a restaurant. He was a cashier so he needed to communicate with people every single day. Somehow he made some friends by just talking to them. By using of his experience, he could find his girlfriend eventually. As you can see were he not to have this experience, he couldn't find his girlfriend.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the ability to make many new friends easily, is indispensable in order to have a happier life. Not only can it bring new things to learn for you, but also it can help you to socialize more effectively by using your experience. Considering all reasons which mentioned above, may lead us to improve our ability to make many new friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is vi...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...th a small number of people over a long period of time is vital for happiness. However, some o...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
... reasons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the ideas') or simply say ''some ideas''.
Suggestion: some of the ideas; some ideas
...an cast a shadow doubt of the fact that some of ideas which brought success and happiness for...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'bad news'.
Suggestion: bad news
... example, in my own experience, I heard a bad news about my major two years ago. I was tol...
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Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...my friend was too shy to talk to girls. After some years he could find a job at a res...
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Line 5, column 758, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...were he not to have this experience, he couldnt find his girlfriend. From what has b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, as to, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45383104126 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50519586969 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481335952849 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5055122006 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9642857143 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1785714286 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262083481585 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687491635803 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837380132838 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178472206951 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538096252231 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.