Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, young people have played a prominent role in all societies. Due to it is paramount importance, the researcher believes that young people have a strong ability to change the world. A controversial question which is often raised this idea that whether young citizens have right influence in the important decision which makes in the society or not. I personally contend that young people have the main effect on the decision in society. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite factor to be mentioned is that the young people have a special role in the important situation in the community such as become students, researcher, and many other situations like this so that, beyond a shadow of a doubt, they have right influence on the society. Since young people studying at the university, they can solve the important problem like air pollution and traffic congestion by doing some research and examine in the university. So, the student finds an efficient solution which introduces to the government so that the government use these solutions to solve problems. A significant example that strikes in my mind is about my own experience. When I was studying at the university, I had done the project. This project was about the increase of the CO2 in the atmosphere, and I must find the solution for reducing CO2. I found the efficient solution and introduced to the government so that I made directly effect on the important decision in my country.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that most people who work as government people and make important reasons for society have young kids. To shed more light on this matter, inasmuch as the government have young children, they absolutely think about the future of their children; hence, the young children make the influence on society. Furthermore, in the most scientific conference that holds for problems, most members of the conference are young citizenship. Based on the most recent study by Iran Census Bureau, 86% members of the conference are young people who make important decisions.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the young people have the influence on the important decision that makes by governments. I believe that the young people not only have the right effects on the society such as introducing the efficient solution for the important problem but also have an indirect influence on the government as the kids of government's children.
- TOEFL TPO 40 - Integrated Writing Task 83
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- Some people like to buy and eat their meals at restaurants frequently while others like to do this at home. Which do you prefer? Why? 70
- TPO 28 70
- do you agree or disagree? young people now days dont give enough time to helping their community. +toefl essay 71
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10262529833 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81317540033 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467780429594 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2608553512 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.777777778 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94444444444 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259306490471 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905158559775 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683431891353 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187187819094 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567584539337 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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