do you agree or disagree? if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying?

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do you agree or disagree? if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying?

Since the beginning of the last century, the concept of choosing a job has been brought to public attention. Some people believe that if they have the opportunity to get secure jobs, they should take it right away; however, there is a substantial body of evidence stats that people should wait for more satisfying ones. From a personal perspective, the former point of view carries more weight; given that working has a positive impact on people’s personality, experience, and financial situation. Below I will strive my supporting points in more detail.

The first and the foremost point, provided that people start to work any job, they could gain a variety of skills. A Vivid example that can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, in Canada there are plenty of people immigrated from the developing countries, such as Ethiopia, China and Indonesia hoping in a better life, they start their life by working any job, not only to earn money; but also, to improve their personality. To put it in another way, they could expose to a new culture; hence, they should work to enhance their skills , such as language skill, social skill and working under pressure. Consequently, getting a job even not the dreamed one is imperative for some people to complete their life.

Next, coupled with proper skills, experience is another benefit of having a job. For instance, technological engineers in Silicon Valley start their practical life as employees in teamwork, by the time they could gain experience and take manager positions; furthermore, during this time they can take courses to keep themselves updated with any new technological inventions. To that end, working can add to people’s experience and help them to promote to better positions with better salaries. Therefore, having a job is significant.

Although the previous reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only reasons available. There is another subtle point that must be born in mind. life has become very expensive, which enforces people to work. A recent survey conducted by the National Association of Finance in California found that not only the rents and prices of houses has been increased recently; but also, the prices of goods such as groceries and clothes. Thus, nobody can afford to live without working. As a result, with this high cost of living it better for people to have a secure jobs rather than waiting for an interesting ones.

Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, having a job has crucial benefits and underestimating the importance of these benefits in our life is not logical. It is suggested that people compromise and ensure to achieve satisfying/secure career balance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...they should work to enhance their skills , such as language skill, social skill an...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Life
...subtle point that must be born in mind. life has become very expensive, which enforc...
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Line 7, column 560, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...esult, with this high cost of living it better for people to have a secure jobs rather...
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Line 7, column 595, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...g it better for people to have a secure jobs rather than waiting for an interesting ...
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Line 7, column 639, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
... rather than waiting for an interesting ones. Taking everything into consideration...
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Line 9, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hieve satisfying/secure career balance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0706401766 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79934023826 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55408388521 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.9593483811 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.85 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3486993972 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993037902405 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101257644542 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190709999132 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735717151536 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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