Do you agree or disagree? People meet many problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary.
Since the dawn of civilization, governments are primarily responsible for making improvement in different aspects of human life. Quite a few invaluable consequences of establishing governments in developed countries such as enhancing the health and hygiene circumstances, legislating necessary rules and regulations and expanding the public services cannot be taken for granted. The ever-increasing demands of human being in facing with difficulties have aroused a growing controversy as to whether an individual can get to grips with awkward situations by themselves or they are in desperate need of government's solutions. Although many people may lay emphasis on the idea that the government's prominent role can be superseded by one's effort or the help of his or her family, I resolutely possess the conviction that people's everyday life is fraught with predicaments that can be solved by the help of governments. In the following paragraphs, the most outstanding reasons will be explicated.
The first reason that supports my perspective is concerned with the fact that family's advocacies cannot be a panacea for all our problems. In fact, people may encounter financial, social or legal problems that require a direct intervention and assistance of the government. Take a personal experience as an example, when I wanted to begin my start-up last year, I searched a lot for finding an initial funding source. Due to the fact that the prosperity or failure of a business is hardly predictable at the embryo stage, I could not convincingly persuade my family members to allocate money for investing in my business. Eventually, I found a governmental agency that helps ingenious young people to flourish their innovative plans. My business plan won the award of the agency's annual competition for its novel solutions to reduce the contaminating effects of plastic industries. This was a turning point in my life which helped me to take successful steps towards an economic growth and enjoy the fruits of my efforts and dedication. Had the government not provided me the financial aid, I would not have been able to start the business with the help of my family. As a rule, government rather than family or friends have enormous potential for helping people to get out of predicaments.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that the prime requisite for a government to promote peace, security and prosperity in the country is to pin people's faith on its ability to solve their problems. Indeed, when people realize that their country is in charge of a fair and well-managed government which tries to pave the way for uprooting difficulties of every stratum of the society, it can increase their loyalty to their own country. Some superficial people may contend that family can find a solution to one's problems of all sorts. These people should consider the fact that living in a civilized society brings about inevitable interactions between people and the government. A relevant study which was conducted in America indicates that people who had the experience of using government's assistance to get through problematic situations are more likely to bring up their children as a patriot. This result is probably attributed to the fact that these people's experience has brought home to them that their well-organized government is properly prepared for making their life more convenient.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons leads us to the conclusion that relying on government's help to cope with difficulties not only is a more practical way due to its larger budget and capacities, but also it can be an excellent approach for a government to foster a deep-seated belief in its adequacy among people. It is highly recommended that social activists conduct a thorough research on the effect of encouraging people to put government's services into use since the greater people have regarding this issue, the more government can expand nationalism by fulfilling people's requirements. Failing to do so will definitely sow the seeds of unfaithfulness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ties have aroused a growing controversy as to whether an individual can get to grips with awk...
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Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...tend that family can find a solution to ones problems of all sorts. These people sho...
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Line 7, column 390, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'thorough research'.
Suggestion: thorough research
...commended that social activists conduct a thorough research on the effect of encouraging people to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, so, well, as to, in brief, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3431.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 653.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25421133231 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05508305356 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12468839981 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 346.0 212.727598566 163% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529862174579 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1078.2 618.680645161 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8840519599 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.173913043 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3913043478 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295062970076 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820291760919 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617911816455 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179695681305 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432839528609 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 189.0 86.8835125448 218% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 10.002688172 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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