Do you agree or siagree with the statement?
Government should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics.
Different country's government has different priorities for spending money. Some prefer budgeting more on arts while some prefer athletics such as football, basketball and so on. I acknowledge the idea of spending money on athletics rather than on arts. This preference will be exemplified in the ensuing paragraphs focusing mainly on two fundamental reasons
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To begin with, the athletics has more craze all over the world than the artistics and it strengthens the Nations' unity. Spending money on athletics such as promoting state sponsored Olympic teams, obviously, represents our Nation better in the world. The world cup can be the compelling example of this. The craze of world cup is really unbeatable all over the world. If their Nation wins world cup people really feel proud of their nation. They are all united in favor of their Nation and cheer up together. This obviously feels our heart with love and pride.
Moreover, promoting athletics inspires the citizen to get involved in those activities, consequently, promoting health and wellbeing of people. Arts, on the other hand, is all about being creative and does not involve physical effort. The government focusing on the physical games really creates positive and motivating environment for every citizen. For instance, my friend used to play cricket in home ground. But as soon as the government increased incentives for the national cricketers he got inspired to compete in the national team. Now he is a national player and doing really well.
Taking all these aforementioned ideas in consideration, We can strongly assume that spending money on the athletics is better than for the arts in any nation. The main reasons behind this are to represent the nation better in the world and inspiring the citizens for better health and wellbeing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...izens for better health and wellbeing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, moreover, really, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22184300341 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73638557348 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566552901024 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.747637652 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5263157895 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4210526316 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120839235389 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416424688115 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493855552667 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811219176742 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395040746943 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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