Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world. Do you agree or disagree
Currently, people start to care for education because they think that education is the most prevailing approach which can be used to modify the whole globe. I totally concur with this opinion because it manages to raise people’s consciousness, exert more employment opportunities, and improve problem solving skills .
Firstly, education helps raise people’s awareness as well as change their behavior. Needless to say, education builds consciousness of laws and the consequences so that people can avoid violating those laws. If there is no education, people cannot distinguish what they should do or should not do; as a result, they might deliberately commit offences. Therefore, education foretells citizens all the risks which they probably confront once they engage in criminal activities. For example, there is a law in Vietnam that students under eighteen years old are not allowed to ride motorbikes. Woefully, my brother-17 years old- had no clue about this law so he decided to ride a motorbike while hanging out with his friends. Consequently, he was fined by the police officer. From then on, my brother attempted to shield himself from juvenile delinquency.
Secondly, better employment opportunities are exerted owing to education . When people apply for a job, they have to compete with hundreds of other candidates for a vacant position. The lower the education level is, the greater the number of people applying for the same low-paid jobs is. Nevertheless, the rate of obtaining a fulfilling job increases if people have the proper qualifications or educational background. Hence, they will have chances to upgrade their life. For instance, my sister had the advantage of offering an internship for a famous company, beating thousands of applications thanks to her fly colors.
Finally, education enhances problem solving skills. Society is getting problematic everyday; thereby, people should prepare themselves with essential skills which are needed to survive. Educational system aids people to have logical thinking and make life decisions on their own by giving you some life tips and simulating some matters that children might face when they grow up . To illustrate, when children become adults, they have to face a load of issues namely study loans, independent accommodation and so on. However, if one who has thoroughly educated themselves can end up making sound decisions which make their life better.
In conclusion, people recognize the importance of education in this day and age because it brings back more employment opportunities; furthermore, it widens people’s knowledge of social information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47303921569 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97897272711 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629901960784 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9740897771 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22727272727 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142824067472 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401375740046 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463515842995 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777001641433 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400628995745 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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