Jack is an retired worker, and he enjoys free life in the past decade. He has a great amount of time on recreation which means he have more time to follow his idol. His favorite celebrity is Michael Jordan who is one of the best basketball players ever. Jack had admired him for more than twenty years. He is definitely eligible to be a faithful fan of Jordan. The example is fictional, however the phenomenon is typical. Celebrities are inevitable for old people, because they have admire their idols for many years, meanwhile, they own more free time compared to young people
Previously, old people are more idolatrous because they will be more likely to have long-term adoration. Keeping focus on a celebrity over time, concentrating on news about that person, will form a totally different from admiring a idol for just few months. Any unfortunate incidents on the celebrity that have been adored are deeply-moving to its fans. If that celebrity is slandered by interviewer, its fans will feel infuriated as itself, which means even fans and the person with great fame are not closely related before, through out time, unperceivable relationship will form.
Simultaneously, old people are generally retired which means having more amusement time than young people who are normally studying at school or working at companies. They will feel quite bored and may start to dawdle. Celebrity could be a spice in old people's life, old people can consume part of their time by following their idols.
Some people's opinion is that old fans cannot be as enthusiastic as young fans, because their old age. Nevertheless, age is just a state of number. For example in UK, there used to be a old man who was a fan of Stallone. And he determined to exercise and build his body as strong as his idol. After a year, he succeeded. Hardly a young man will own as great determination and enthusiasm.
In conclusion, old people will rely on celebrities more than young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
Jack is an retired worker, and he enjoys free life...
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Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...nt of time on recreation which means he have more time to follow his idol. His favor...
^^^^
Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'admired'.
Suggestion: admired
...table for old people, because they have admire their idols for many years, meanwhile, ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... form a totally different from admiring a idol for just few months. Any unfortuna...
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Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...at fame are not closely related before, through out time, unperceivable relationship will f...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...time by following their idols. Some peoples opinion is that old fans cannot be as e...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...er. For example in UK, there used to be a old man who was a fan of Stallone. And ...
^
Line 7, column 321, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Hardly' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...s his idol. After a year, he succeeded. Hardly a young man will own as great determina...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88095238095 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73969285689 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8577271536 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10189249748 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305521741288 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419449295968 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766283140565 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039314166283 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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