The Internet benefits people's lives. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many people get numerous benefits from Internet. They shopping online, communicate with others online, even bank their money on online banks. However, in my opinion, Internet does not benefits human life as it looked. It can cause both mental and physics problems to people.
Internet causes people lose face-to–face communication ability. Nowadays， there is numerous Social Network Services in people’s life, people can edit words plenty of times until they satisfied with those words when they communicate with people online. Therefore they cannot communicate with people confidently in reality world. I watched a TED speech; the person who gave that speech is a mother. He daughter was as normal as other teenagers. They all interest in Social Network Services. Slowly this mother realized he daughter hardly ever speak to others in the reality, even with her. She talked to her daughter and found out her daughter was afraid to make mistakes when she speak to other people in reality. Owing to this lack of face-to –face communication ability, more people will get mental problem such as Major Depressive Disorder.
Moreover, Internet also supplies a large number of unhealthy information to teenagers even to children. Teenagers and children have a strong curiosity, and they lack the ability to distinguish information from good or bad. Take my one of my classmates for example, who is curious in the information about sex. He searched the information about that, and comprehends some bad information that he should not know. In addition, since he understood about sex, he started to say some strange things to us, and the expression in his eyes when he looked at girls changed. Another example is my brother who is interested in the game analysis video. He learns plenty of bad words form that video and speaks them frequently.
Internet can be harmful to people’s eyes and causes them lack sports skills. People usually use electronic device to surf online. Most electronic devices are harmful to people’s eyes. Moreover, if people sit in front of an electronic device for a long time and do not exercise, they lack sport skills. My father is a businessperson. He always does work with his laptop all day. Therefore he is plumper than he was not a businessperson. In addition, my father is shortsighted because he always stares at the computer screen for a long period.
All in all, Internet has plenty of shortcomings. Because it leads to people have physical and mental damaged. Therefore I believe people should develop more interest in the real world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...wever, in my opinion, Internet does not benefits human life as it looked. It can cause b...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...en they communicate with people online. Therefore they cannot communicate with people con...
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Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'speaks'.
Suggestion: speaks
...er was afraid to make mistakes when she speak to other people in reality. Owing to th...
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Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...er. Moreover, Internet also supplies a large number of unhealthy information to teenagers even...
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Line 7, column 389, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ways does work with his laptop all day. Therefore he is plumper than he was not a busines...
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Line 9, column 111, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...eople have physical and mental damaged. Therefore I believe people should develop more in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16312056738 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81853009746 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539007092199 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2317435621 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4516129032 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6451612903 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165835244412 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467324063031 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597633277111 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104732309013 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479612123283 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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