The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Undoubtedly, one of the foremost and paramount ambitions of all human beings is being prosperous, and they always make an effort to attain this purpose. However, calmness has different meaning among people, and there are a lot of factors that have effect on it. Indeed, family plays a significant role in people’s life. While some of people believe that extended family is less important now than it was in the past, other agree with the obverse idea. Nevertheless, in my point of view, although extended family is less important now but having extended family can be great.
Today, extended family is less important now because of some important and critical reasons, which are related with modern life. One of the most important factors is independence, people likes being independent and they want to experiment and explore, decide and live lonely. I don’t know is there psychological evidence to explain this behavior or not but this is my own experience that my brothers and my friends and also everyone that I know like independent life, they want to make and spend their money and they like to make decision for their life. Another important factor is modern life conditions, good job is not available always in our hometown and people go to another city and this is reason for abandonment of family, also new house are small to living a lot of people and they are always designed for two or three persons. Communication tools are simply available and we can contact with our family several times and speak with all of them, so distance is not a big problem. Last year I was in Tehran and my family lived in Khoy, my mother called me all time and we spoke about daily events, really I thought that I am in home.
In spite what mentioned before, it is not debatable that extended family has numerous advantages, this is so exciting to live with all family in the same house, actually this is like you are in the family party all day, this is crowded and noisy but it’s time for happiness and overcome to anxiety. When I was growing up we lived with my father’s family, children were able to play all the time with each other and we always were happy and healthy. Our family was a big and members solved their problem together and if someone had a problem other men or women helped and there wasn’t any pressure on that person. Extended family makes an effort to solve each member’s problem and responsibility and respect is important aspect of these families. In the extended family works divided between members and each person has specific works, for instance I was responsible for buying bread and my brother bought milk every day, and all kids helped each other in school homework. According to this reasons some people believe that live in extended family isn’t less important than it was in the past.
In recapitulation, each person depending on his characteristics and temperaments believe that what living form is good for him or his family. However, in my point of view the extended family is now less important than it was in the past because of modern life style.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 332, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the people') or simply say ''some people''.
Suggestion: some of the people; some people
...icant role in people's life. While some of people believe that extended family is less im...
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Line 4, column 98, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...extended family has numerous advantages, this is so exciting to live with all fam...
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Line 4, column 429, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...lay all the time with each other and we always were happy and healthy. Our family was a big...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... other in school homework. According to this reasons some people believe that live i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'so', 'while', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225122349103 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.166394779772 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0848287112561 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0538336052202 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0701468189233 0.0685040099705 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110929853181 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0326264274062 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62209702886 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0195758564437 0.0309702414327 63% => OK
Particles: 0.00163132137031 0.00188951952338 86% => OK
Determiners: 0.0766721044046 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00326264274062 0.0209618222197 16% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00978792822186 0.0139019557991 70% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3121.0 2387.08602151 131% => OK
No of words: 539.0 408.028673835 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79035250464 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.337662337662 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.231910946197 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.159554730983 0.174417080927 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0871985157699 0.112833075102 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62209702886 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465677179963 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.8477583149 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.3684210526 20.5533526081 138% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4734846802 48.84282405 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.263157895 120.699889404 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3684210526 20.5533526081 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.526315789474 0.644075263715 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 51.5595156723 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.26966292135 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435091677796 0.300154397459 145% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.136796642966 0.103427244359 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0615626972001 0.0752933317313 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527407193984 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.107887479733 0.151897553556 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198684708228 0.114077575197 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131430634712 0.0781384742642 168% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.481846847765 0.336927656856 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0667167038557 0.067059652881 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369991403827 0.210909579961 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696675608195 0.0618886996521 113% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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